tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post950011468508459953..comments2023-08-01T07:08:17.745-02:30Comments on Conversations From Land's Edge: #fridayflash~The Disappearing ManAlan W. Davidsonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17067022519729701245noreply@blogger.comBlogger29125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-10494996883198199012010-09-10T07:58:17.326-02:302010-09-10T07:58:17.326-02:30You think you're late, Venutolo?
I liked this...You think you're late, Venutolo?<br /><br />I liked this. The missed-erection was a great piece of humour to keep the piece from getting too serious.<br /><br />The point-of-view feels genuine, too.Bernardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13194421719317300410noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-26909718687496730652010-09-04T02:49:13.140-02:302010-09-04T02:49:13.140-02:30Alan... I'm late to the game here. Been ridicu...Alan... I'm late to the game here. Been ridiculously behind. But IO loved the vivid details and flair in this piece, brother...Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11413377601369107260noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-42949665060445613882010-08-31T12:45:48.513-02:302010-08-31T12:45:48.513-02:30Great characterization again, and I too am a big f...Great characterization again, and I too am a big fan of anything 80s. (Don't tell anyone, okay...I was just a kid)Aaron Polsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15173267932358617304noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-63757921586902273482010-08-30T22:22:21.471-02:302010-08-30T22:22:21.471-02:30Peggy- Hey, sophmoric humour has its place. The la...Peggy- Hey, sophmoric humour has its place. The lacquered box? A guy can't give away all his secrets now, can he?<br /><br />Akasha- Thank you, kind lady!<br /><br />Icy- And thank you, too, for those kind words.<br /><br />Catherine- I simply saw him as a friend to Bobby. And a cop. Maybe.Alan W. Davidsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17067022519729701245noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-54353655772700450602010-08-29T22:45:03.147-02:302010-08-29T22:45:03.147-02:30Now I'm wondering what was in the box and what...Now I'm wondering what was in the box and what happened to him. Was he a gangster? A vampire? Inquiring minds want to know... :)<br /><br />Seriously, great characters. Give us more! :)Cat Russellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14160039271069426174noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-71128384492074842752010-08-29T20:41:43.570-02:302010-08-29T20:41:43.570-02:30I love the way that I can see Mickey through Bobby...I love the way that I can see Mickey through Bobby's Pop Culture eyes. It's like you've channelled the spirit of Tarantino for this one - very good work!Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-31976778542902654572010-08-29T13:29:03.160-02:302010-08-29T13:29:03.160-02:30Excellent story. Reminded me a bit of Stephen King...Excellent story. Reminded me a bit of Stephen King's 'Hearts in Atlantis'. :)Akasha Savage.https://www.blogger.com/profile/13482147165827577180noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-10643016901746034512010-08-29T12:47:13.907-02:302010-08-29T12:47:13.907-02:30So, what was in the laquered box?
Well done, and...So, what was in the laquered box? <br /><br />Well done, and as the others have said, the pop references worked nicely in moving this story along. <br /><br />I thought Mickey was going to chuckle at his "high time I quit" joke. Glad Bobby didn't catch it. (hehe--yeah, I have a sophomoric side)pegjethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15255191759031800811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-21445707023086848222010-08-29T06:34:20.909-02:302010-08-29T06:34:20.909-02:30Kathryn- Phfft! Kids these days...
Mazzz- Thank y...Kathryn- Phfft! Kids these days...<br /><br />Mazzz- Thank you kindly. The Mickey G point of view would be different, for sure.<br /><br />Deanna- Thanks for saying that<br /><br />Lou- Very true. Try to find someone in their forties that hasn't seen all of those shows.<br /><br />Rachel- Thanks! Sweet of you to say so. I thought that in this case the mystery of Mickey was best left to the reader.<br /><br />Maria- I grew up on them too. So many of those shows were based on crime and mystery...and here was this stranger living the life.Alan W. Davidsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17067022519729701245noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-71097174471296777862010-08-28T19:47:34.732-02:302010-08-28T19:47:34.732-02:30Mickey is a mysterious character. I want to know m...Mickey is a mysterious character. I want to know more about him. I like all the references to the TV shows. I grew up with all of those shows. so I can identify with Bobby's take on things.Joz Varlohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12750541029227514781noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-91843387906923857982010-08-28T19:29:25.307-02:302010-08-28T19:29:25.307-02:30Great job on this one Alan. I love the way you wea...Great job on this one Alan. I love the way you weave bits of pop culture throughout to add depth, as well as time and place into this story. I also like the way you don't reveal too much about Mickey, even to the end. Great storytelling here.Rachel Blackbirdsonghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02246966713076881105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-79142654195772827632010-08-28T13:29:37.713-02:302010-08-28T13:29:37.713-02:30So much of our perceptions are indeed shaped by po...So much of our perceptions are indeed shaped by popular culture and especially TV, and you've woven a really wonderul tale and example of this.Lou Freshwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08849342766852653969noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-64836214989441707212010-08-28T12:24:38.277-02:302010-08-28T12:24:38.277-02:30Love this Alan! As most everyone has already said,...Love this Alan! As most everyone has already said, the characterization here is so well done, and in so few words. One of your best.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-51109756509542890672010-08-28T09:54:43.488-02:302010-08-28T09:54:43.488-02:30Loved this. The boy's POV was perfectly done. ...Loved this. The boy's POV was perfectly done. Mickey G is an awesome character. How about the Mickey G POV sometime in the future?mazzz_in_Leedshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01498100483681096442noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-44513643368726329222010-08-27T23:24:43.091-02:302010-08-27T23:24:43.091-02:30This story was fabulous. But, I'd expected no ...This story was fabulous. But, I'd expected no less. I love the way you got inside Bobby's head...I could actually hear the boy's thoughts.<br /><br />I find myself wanting to admonish this young lad for speaking so cavalierly about killing people...I'm going to need a moment with him...kathrynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06152568985075401447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-41844786118926947372010-08-27T22:46:45.752-02:302010-08-27T22:46:45.752-02:30Marisa- Thanks. I wonder if Mickey 'MacGyvered...Marisa- Thanks. I wonder if Mickey 'MacGyvered' his way out of his situation...<br /><br />Cathy- I'm hoping that a lot of folks could relate to the TV viewing.<br /><br />EJ- Thanks very much. Glad you liked it.<br /><br />Laurita- Thanks, Laurita!<br /><br />Debbie- You are right with your assessment. I did present a version of that to the writing class 2 1/2 years ago as an assignment. Good memory!<br /><br />Katherine- Lots of '80s TV + Lots of time outside = Good Time Management! I'm pleased that you enjoyed those old references.<br /><br />VR- Many thanks for your kind words.<br /><br />Pamila- Thanks for those kind comments.<br /><br />Erin- Wow, you're way to kind. Thanks!<br /><br />John- Thanks, I'm glad you liked it. The Mickey says he's pleased as well...<br /><br />GP- I live for nostalgia. Those were very kind words, GP. Thanks very much.<br /><br />David- Honest, I never touched your comment! (you're such a clown). Thank you sir. I agree, you can't help but feel bad for the boy and what he's lost.<br /><br />Adam- You're right, TV and tattoos always capturen the imagination of kids. Thanks very much for your comments.Alan W. Davidsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17067022519729701245noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-3685521144160524982010-08-27T19:46:07.169-02:302010-08-27T19:46:07.169-02:30Fantastic, the TV references instantly connect wit...Fantastic, the TV references instantly connect with the child in you, I can remember being a kid and being fascinated by people with tattoos, very evocative.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-25901403855277445672010-08-27T17:46:16.809-02:302010-08-27T17:46:16.809-02:30Where's my comment gone? I left one earlier, ...Where's my comment gone? I left one earlier, Alan.<br /><br />Loved this story, but was a bit upset for the kid. He seemed to need that father figure. Maybe, just maybe, you could resurrect this story a bit further down the line and, well....??<br /><br />Have a great weekend, Alan.David Barberhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05006533626998905560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-20869415555830563132010-08-27T17:43:55.685-02:302010-08-27T17:43:55.685-02:30So much of our lives as children is framed up by w...So much of our lives as children is framed up by what we see on TV. This was a great piece of writing both for the nostalgia it evokes and the story that captures a slice of life so eloquently. Nice work.Genevieve Jackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16178276724159826428noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-65807233829544994642010-08-27T16:46:21.240-02:302010-08-27T16:46:21.240-02:30Life passing through. Interesting visit from the M...Life passing through. Interesting visit from the Mickey. Filtering him by way of pop culture clicked along nicely.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-22346046033927721652010-08-27T16:37:51.107-02:302010-08-27T16:37:51.107-02:30I loved both Bobby and Mickey; you characterized t...I loved both Bobby and Mickey; you characterized them very well. I also liked how this wasn't fluffed up at the end. Real stuff. That's what it's about. Good penning, Alan.EChttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09359075647077590741noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-45843599783499905922010-08-27T14:18:27.503-02:302010-08-27T14:18:27.503-02:30I liked so much about this, the innocent, awed qua...I liked so much about this, the innocent, awed quality of the boy's interest, the mysteriousness of Mickey's life, all the clues to what kind of a person he might be contrasting with how kind he was to Bobby. Very nice.Pamila Paynehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14398900249578356483noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-10462427300916754412010-08-27T13:01:27.025-02:302010-08-27T13:01:27.025-02:30Excellent TV references. Very well done. I really ...Excellent TV references. Very well done. I really like the sentiment of this story as well. The characters come alive immediately. Not easy to do.V.R. Leavitthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04695046154516205907noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-22404635928705928082010-08-27T12:15:58.036-02:302010-08-27T12:15:58.036-02:30Loved the invocation of setting through the use of...Loved the invocation of setting through the use of TV shows. I'd put this in the late 70s/early 80s. (I'm probably about Mickey's age.) Why is it that I seemed to have watched a ton of TV myself when I was that young, yet always seemed to have time to go outside?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4136127029720129227.post-41766492698804619602010-08-27T10:11:11.982-02:302010-08-27T10:11:11.982-02:30I love this story, but have a feeling I have heard...I love this story, but have a feeling I have heard it before... Did you bring it to one of our classes with Ed?Debbiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02149358221066685837noreply@blogger.com